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On Waking from a Dream

I walk through the sky every night on my way to dawn

鈥ˋnd in my dreaming pass countless stars upon the way

鈥ˋurora's skirt my trail upon the coast that marks the northern sky

鈥ˋnd meets the rainbow as it dips to earth鈥?br> In myriad colours as my eyes flash into light

鈥–louds give way to sun and darkness disappears

鈥ˋs once again the day takes hold anew

鈥∕y feet refreshed begin a firmer course.

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I don't think it's vague or just a string of images. You're talking about an Aurora. I've never seen one, even in a dream. I accept that this dream would be refreshing. The only line that I feel doesn't seem to keep tempo with the rest is "Clouds give way to sun and darkness disappears", and that is because the transformation to dawn and a waking state should magical and dancing like the rest. How did clouds get in there? Other than that it is lovely.

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Fr. you may not know it but if you solicit disinterested critical interpretations, it would be better not to influence them by offering your own. It is hard to offer an objective critique when the poet already influences independent ideas in edits. Leave the poem to lead its own life. It will survive better if orphaned. Apparently that is the nature of all literary art as Roland Barthes aptly explained in his famous hypothesis; The author is dead.